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New Rich Girl In Town

Post by 18log on Fri Sep 04, 2009 6:37 pm

Well funnybones021 thought it was a really good idea, so here's what i had in mind, see what you guys think. cheers

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Another more rich and popular girl arrives at PS118 and immediately becomes more popular than Rhonda because of her kindness and ability to lend some money to kids that don't have enough money for lunch or bus fair.

as Rhonda tries to get along with the HA gang like the new rich and popular girl, everything all of a sudden backfires.
(kids now asking her for more money etc.)


that's all i got so far.. it was in the misc. scenes, but yeah i put it in here anyways x] hehe
any other thoughts?
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by acemcjace169 on Wed Sep 09, 2009 3:01 am

I could see this having a great morale. Good friends are not bought.
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The New Girl in Town #2

Post by ElegantVamp on Thu Sep 24, 2009 12:20 am

Here's the outline we have so far:

Okay, so this new girl, [we can decide on the name later, right? ] moves to Hilwood, and she's a lot richer and somewhat prettier than Rhonda. And so she impresses the gang with all her cool, new, expensive, state-of-the-art stuff.

So Rhonda, feeling jealous that the new kid is getting all the attention, and is richer than she is, tries to outdo her, but it backfires. For example, she gets a new pair of Caprini high heeled shoes which cost like, $500. (remember Caprini from the episode, "Polishing Rhonda"?) But the new girl gets a designer outfit from a different designer that all together costs $2,050. And, so Rhonda tries to outdo the new girl once and for all, so she buys this really expensive... "thing", but she finds out that she's spent like, half her father's paycheck. (if that's even possible?)

So, Rhonda begins to feel kind of down, until Arnold comes and tries to make things better. So, Rhonda confesses that she feels that all she has to offer to the school, and her social life is her wealth, and social class, but Arnold tries to show Rhonda that there's more to her than money.
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by funnybones021 on Thu Sep 24, 2009 1:38 am

This is a good overview, but the outline needs to be very detailed. You really want the outline to show exactly what is going to happen and the chronology of the story. A 1st draft of the script would also work.

Good start and you have plenty of time to write it (basically there's no time limit on outlines, so take as much time as you need).

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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by tendra91 on Thu Sep 24, 2009 4:20 am

Wow, a $2050 outfit?! I gotta get me some of that! lol j/k j/k
lol Jeez, I wonder how much Rhonda is going to spend then. O_O

Like funnybones said, it's a good idea to have very detailed outline. When I say it makes script-writing easier, trust me, it makes script-writing easier because you know what you're going to write about. It's kind of like writing an outline for a school essay, for example. The more detailed your essay outline is, the easier it is to write your essay as a whole. That way, you don't really need to spend much time thinking about the big picture (because you've already got it thought out in your essay), you just now have to think about the minor "icing-on-top" details (e.g. easter eggs you want to plant in or small pop culture references, ect.)

Outline is looking pretty good. Things you might want to think about:

1) HA! very often follows the "rule of three" (if you don't know what that is, you can look it up in the Wiki; right now my link url is not working in this post...). So consider thinking about at least three parallel scenes where you compare Rhonda with the new girl.

2) What exactly is the new girl's "cool, new, state-of-the-art stuff" that impresses the other kids? You could probably squeeze in a mini-parody of a useless/wacky invention. ("Look, my battery-operated fork rotates my spaghetti for me, so I don't have to!" ...Ironically, those stupid forks actually exist in real life T_T)

3) How exactly does Rhonda try to outdo the rich girl? Is it just going to be the "uber-expensive thing" or is she going to go through multiple attempts before resorting to buying the super-expensive thing?

4) How exactly did Rhonda get the means to spend that much money? Does she have her own credit card, used her dad's without her dad knowing, ect?

I don't really have any comments for the ending because it's quite general, but you should get the idea of the level of detail you want in your outline.

So that's some food for thought, and like funnybones said, take your time. I know you're in school and you've got a life outside of HA! (I'm hoping j/k j/k XD) so don't rush it. Make a personal schedule or goal of when you want to finish your outline/script if you want to, but don't overestimate yourself. Keep it cool

BTW, I merged your thread with 18log's original thread.
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by 18log on Thu Sep 24, 2009 6:47 am

Thanks for the advices directors

Yeah me and ElegantVamp are still thinking it through
We'll post the real very detailed outline when were done and ready

lol and of course we have a life outside of HA!
right ElegantVamp? (;



Spoiler:
too much drama happening in school though......
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by Saphine on Thu Sep 24, 2009 8:05 am

I like how this is going so far. Smile I can't wait to see how it turns out.
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by ElegantVamp on Thu Sep 24, 2009 2:41 pm

18log wrote:Thanks for the advices directors

Yeah me and ElegantVamp are still thinking it through
We'll post the real very detailed outline when were done and ready

lol and of course we have a life outside of HA!
right ElegantVamp? (;

LMAO Yeah!
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by ElegantVamp on Thu Sep 24, 2009 2:43 pm

BTW, I merged your thread with 18log's original thread.
I was wondering what happened to it. XD
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by HA1996 on Tue Apr 06, 2010 10:18 pm

Grr... I had an idea like this a while ago but you beat me to it!

So... this new girl moves to Hillwood, becomes more popular than Rhonda, and makes Rhonda green with envy. Great idea.

But I was thinking... maybe she becomes like the next Lila? Arnold likes her-likes her, she like-likes him, and Helga's trying to split them up. And to make matters worse, the girl looks just like Helga-as-Cecile from the Valentine's Day special.

I've been brainstorming to write a story to this effect and wanted some feedback.

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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by Weird1 on Tue Apr 13, 2010 10:20 am

Eh, I like the whole Rhonda vs. Rich Girl thing better. Arnold liking some other girl seems kinda silly at this point. He's still trying to figure out his feelings for Helga, and here he is, getting involved with some new, rich girl. -_-

Not that it isn't an interesting idea, I just don't think it would really work. I'm tired of Arnold's vain little infatuations with other girls, and it would be rather evil of him to go getting involved with some new girl when he knows Helga has feelings for him, and he's still trying to figure out his own feelings. It seems rather inplausible.

But since you're saying that you're writing a story like this, then it sounds interesting, and I would love to see what you come up with. I just don't think it would work in the the actual 6th season.

Still, it's interesting. I will reward your very original brain with a stupid flower icon. flower

Enjoy, enjoy.
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by shameonpretzel on Tue Apr 13, 2010 1:26 pm

Weird1 wrote:Eh, I like the whole Rhonda vs. Rich Girl thing better. Arnold liking some other girl seems kinda silly at this point. He's still trying to figure out his feelings for Helga, and here he is, getting involved with some new, rich girl. -_-

I agree.

We need less ideas that focus on the same-old Helga-Arnold dynamic and more ideas that centre around the rest of the show's cast.

The Hey Arnold! universe be huge, after all.
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by HA1996 on Tue Apr 13, 2010 8:33 pm

That's true.

What I was thinking was more along the lines making the new girl similar to Helga so that Arnold realizes that, if he likes people who remind him of Helga, he must have feelings for the real Helga (I suggested that the new girl even look like Helga, if you recall).

Then, his 'thing' for the new girl would be over by the end of the episode (the rich girl finds an equally rich boy-Lorenzo, perhaps?- and develops a crush on him).

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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by HA1996 on Thu Apr 15, 2010 12:13 am

Of course, this New Girl against Rhonda thing is definitely good too, it occurred to me that seeing the new girl and Rhonda duking it out would be a lot more entertaining than two ten-year-olds (Arnold and the new girl) flirting and a third (Helga) trying to break them up.

Maybe, though, the new girl having a crush on someone else (like Lorenzo, as suggested by my other post) will work...


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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by shameonpretzel on Thu Apr 15, 2010 12:24 am

Is a crush really necessary? If you're going to focus on the fact that this new character is rich, why squander it by recycling tired storylines?
:/

OK - granted, Lorenzo crushing on the girl may make a good plot - if only to give his character more backstory - but I still have to side with everyone else in saying the rich girl would be more effective if she was at odds with Rhonda as opposed to Helga.

And I think involving Rich Girl that closely to the Jungle Movie is borderline Mary Sue.

Just my two cents
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by HA1996 on Thu Apr 15, 2010 12:44 am

I definitely like giving Lorenzo more of a backstory by having him crushing on this girl...

But, you're right, the whole 'crush' storyline should probably rest in peace. The new girl fighting with Rhonda, I think,is the best storyline. Just trying to be creative and use a new character to the fullest extent.

Thanks for the really WONDERFUL constructive criticism!

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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

Post by RoseThorn on Sat Apr 24, 2010 11:38 pm

This is definitely a great idea. Very Happy
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Re: New Rich Girl In Town

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