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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 3:49 am

I went to bed last night and the moment my head hit the pillow I got this idea. Figuring it was past midnight, I wrote it down and tried to go to sleep...and then my son woke up and refused to go back to sleep until four, so I spent most of my time working out the plotline for this particular one (...I was so excited by the idea I started storyboarding it, to get a better idea of the layout I want if I can find an artist).

What I like about this idea is that it'll get some of Helga's relationship with Phoebe in there, Helga wanting Arnold's attention and Phoebe trying for Gerald's attention. I was going to put Big Bob in here, too (with him actually being proud of Helga), but I thought it might make the story a bit too...busy.


Plot:

It would open up with Gerald and Arnold discussing a poster they're looking at - girl's volleyball tryouts are coming up. Gerald wants to watch them, and asks Arnold what he thinks of female athletes. Arnold shrugs, and says he thinks they're all right. Pan around the corner to where Helga is eagerly listening in, and Phoebe, more reluctantly, is as well. Helga grabs Phoebe and shouts that this is it, this is an opportunity for both of them. Phoebe isn't following. Helga elaborates that lots of guys like sporty girls, and that this is her way to get Arnold to really notice her....and for Phoebe to get Gerald's attention (added like an afterthought). Phoebe isn't sure about this, but Helga insists.

The next day, the girls find that Tish Wittenberg is going to be the A team coach (because I always loved that character...). She explains that only the best girls will make the A team, and that she expects them to be winners. Signal the start of try outs - most of the girls fall over themselves trying to get to the ball...Sheena gets lucky and it hits her on the head, so it technically goes back, Rhonda missed the ball because her cell phone rings, Nadine just barely manages to hit it back, it goes over Lila's head, and Phoebe falls flat on her face trying to dive for it. Helga, on the other hand, manages a spectacular backwards dig (umm...I think this is obvious, but just in case some of you aren't familiar with volleyball, a dig is simply 'scooping' your arms underneath the ball, hitting it back with your hands clasped together. It's not too hard forewards, but backwards it can be tricky). Arnold shouts 'way to go, Helga!' from the stands, and Helga swoons a bit before realizing what she's doing and rolling her eyes at him.

Tish announces that Helga's going to be A team captain. Helga's surprised, but also very pleased. Nadine, Sheena, and 3 other girls make the A team also (I can not for the life of me recall any girls that I haven't put into the story that could be on A team or B team, so these may need to be new characters. I think Big Patty's too old to be on the same team as the other girls). Phoebe, Lila, Rhonda and another 3 girls are all on B team, which Tish announces that Mr. Simmons will be coaching.

The training sequences go as a back and forth, juxtaposing how tough Tish is versus how soft Mr. Simmons is. Tish talks about how she will not accept any losses, that they are here to win. Mr. Simmons reminds the girls that it's only a game. Tish lists her previous victories on her old high school volleyball team...Mr. Simmons sheepishly asks if any of the girls know the rules to volleyball.

The girls try a practice round against one another, but the B team is utterly defeated. They don't manage to get a single point against the A team. At the last minute, Lila makes a great save and returns the ball....only to have Nadine spike it back. Helga almost singlehandedly won the game, as she was serving the whole time. Tish congratulates the A team while Mr. Simmons consoles the B team.

The first game, Arnold and Gerald catch Phoebe and Helga heading out to the court in their volleyball uniforms (I know this is not plot relevant, but I was contemplating the idea that Helga might adopt a ponytail for this episode. Pigtails don't get in the way too badly, but most volleyball players I know wore their hair in a single ponytail or a bun). The boys wish them both luck...Phoebe greatfully accepts it, Helga rolls her eyes and gives a sarcastic thanks to them before running out onto the court.

The B team sits down and watches the A team play, with Gerald, Arnold and the other guys all sitting right behind the team to cheer them on. Sheena manages a good first serve, but the second serve goes out-of-bounds. The ball switches to the visitors', but Nadine once more spikes it back, winning the ball for her team and getting Helga up to serve. I figure with Helga's anger issues and the fact she's already so good at sports, it's pretty believable that she'd be fantastic at volleyball. She serves, she spikes, she digs..."Wow. Helga's really good." Arnold notes. Cue the boys nodding their agreement.

The A team girls win their first game, 15-4 (for those who don't know, a typical volleyball game goes to 15 points. First team to those fifteen points wins). Helga and the other A team girls sit down, and Arnold leans forward and places her on the shoulder, congratulating her on her good game and telling her he's amazed at her skill. Then the B team comes up for their turn. Mr. Simmons shouts his encouragement, reminding the girls to have fun, and Gerald lets out a loud whoop for Phoebe. Unfortunately...the visitors' B team is almost as good as their A team, and the girls do not do so well. "Man, they stink!" Harold calls loudly. Phoebe blushes, Lila looks a little ashamed, and Rhonda just looks annoyed. Gerald elbows him in the ribs and tells him to cool it, adding on a loud "It's okay, you girls can make it back!"...he eyes Arnold, who goes along with it and cries out "yeah, you can do it!" "No they can't, look at the score!" Sid points out. "There's no way they can come back at this point!" Gerald glares at Sid, while Arnold just frowns at him.

After the game, Helga comes up to Phoebe, telling her they'll walk home together. Phoebe sighs and tells Helga she wants to quit. She's not enjoying volleyball, and they're getting laughed at. "Nobody's laughing at you, you're imagining it." Helga insists. "Ha ha, look at the little loser! You got dogged out there!" Harold laughs at Phoebe...Helga punches him in the stomach. "Okay," she amends, "Now nobody's laughing at you." But Phoebe still wants to quit, and suggests that she and Helga find something else to do together. Helga's furious about this suggestion. She's having fun, if Phoebe wants to quit she can, but Helga wants to continue. Phoebe thinks that maybe Helga's only having fun because they're winning, and thinks it might not be so fun once they start losing. Helga snaps back that maybe Phoebe just doesn't like it because she's not good at it. The two storm away from each other, furious.

"Oh, my beloved," Helga cries once she's in the school hall, still in her volleyball uniform and thinking she's away from everyone else, she pulls her locket out of her pocket. She gently strokes the picture as she speaks. "That which has gained even the tiniest bit of your admiration, and it's making my best friend miserable! Do I continue with my athletic display, hoping it will catch your eye and continue to make you notice me, to perchance gain your everlasting love, or should I give it all up for my dearest and most noble friend? Oh, Arnold..." She sighs, closing her eyes and hugging the locket. She hears loud breathing behind her (of course) and doesn't even bother turning around, she merely backhands Brainy, who falls over.

Meanwhile, Phoebe is at her locker, gathering her things in a huff. She's changed back into her outfit, and in a moment of anger throws the volleyball uniform on the ground and stomps on it a few times. "Umm...Phoebe...are you all right?" Arnold had gone back to grab his Science book and caught her outburst. "Oh...Arnold...yes, of course, I'm fine." She smiles and gathers her things up. "Really?" Arnold asks. "Because it's not like you to stomp on your clothes. You sure nothing's bothering you?"

Phoebe sighs, and explains how she and H--a friend, she corrects, had only intended to join the volleyball team for what were "Uh...short-sighted and shallow goals." "Huh?" Phoebe sighs and hangs her head. "We wanted to get two guys' attention." "Oh." Phoebe explains that she hadn't expected to be so bad at it, and certainly wasn't ready to be laughed at for being horrible at it. She wasn't having fun, so she didn't see why her friend wouldn't quit with her, since they'd joined together. Arnold considers for a while.

"But is your friend enjoying it?" Phoebe sighs. "Yes. She really likes it. And she's good at it." "Then I don't know...isn't it kind of selfish to ask her to give that up? You could always find something else to do together in your free time." Phoebe considers. "You're right, Arnold. It was very selfish of me to be doing this...If He---my friend is enjoying volleyball and that guy is paying her a bit more attention, then I can just be happy for her. Thanks, Arnold." "Anytime, Phoebe."

Phoebe goes over to Helga's that night, and apologizes. "It was pointed out to me that I was being selfish, and I'm very sorry, Helga. It's just you were so good without even trying, and I was so terrible at it..." "You're not terrible, Pheebs, you just need practice," Helga insists, throwing a ball Phoebe's way. Phoebe winces and ducks. "And to learn to keep your eyes open when you're playing. That's your real problem, you can't be afraid of the ball." Helga explains. "In fact...why don't you work with me on this? I bet you can be real great at this. Now, first off, your stance..." They work into the night on the game.

A few weeks later is shown, where Phoebe is managing a great volley with a girl on the other team, when she finally gains the upper hand and gains the point. Unfortunately, it's not quite enough, and on the next serve, the other team gains their final point and wins. "That's great, girls, you only lost by a few points this week! You're getting better and better!" Mr. Simmons calls from the sidelines. "Yeah, but they're still losing!" Harold points out. "Shut it, Fat boy, or I'll cram a sock in it for you!" Helga threatens. "Way to go, Phoebe!" she adds. Phoebe gives a fake bow from her spot.

"Hey, Helga?" Arnold asks from his regular spot sitting behind the team. Helga turns to him slowly. "Yeah, what do you want Football Head?" "I think it's really nice that you helped Phoebe do better so she wouldn't quit, and what you just did for her was nice, too...even if it was a little threatening." "What's your point, Arnold-o?" "Nothing. I just...thought it was nice of you." "Whatever." Helga pretends to scoff, and turns around to face the court, her smile growing wilder. "He called me nice!" she thinks to herself.

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I'm sure it could use some fine tuning, but I still rather like the idea. I'm sure we all had that moment when we were kids were we started something, found out we weren't immediately good at it, and wanted to quit. Normally I don't think Phoebe's reaction would have been so bad, if only Harold and Sid hadn't been at the game to make her feel worse about her performance. I believe this is in character, and I still like the idea and I need artists and someone who'd be willing to work with me on the script. Like I said, I've been storyboarding it, and what I planned was to hand my sketches over to any artist who wanted to take it on, so they'd have an idea of where the words would go and where I'd like the characters situated at.

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Post by peachcake21 on Wed Feb 24, 2010 4:53 am

lol
Helga in a pony tail! Wouldn't she look like Hilda!

Isn't Arnold being TOO nice?

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 4:56 am

peachcake21 wrote:lol
Helga in a pony tail! Wouldn't she look like Hilda!

Isn't Arnold being TOO nice?

Well, he's mainly interacting with Phoebe, and he's always been supportive, and Helga's busy with volleyball so isn't getting in enough mean jokes at his expense for him to be bothered by her.

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Post by Dpshrineinclosetgirl on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:26 am

I really like this idea. We’ve had episodes about sports, but never Volleyball. And never centered on Helga and Phoebe. Depending on the length of the episode you could add in scenes where Helga is training Phoebe. Maybe she even used psychology. Perhaps Phoebe is not strong enough to hit the ball, and so Helga tells her to hit it like she is mad at it. Like it is one of the guys who made fun her, Harold for example. Phoebe is timid about that sort of violence at first, but then she actually gets mad and the ball goes flying. I kinda like the idea of phoebe having an aggressive side like we saw when she was hall monitor. Also, maybe the ending scene can have Phoebe’s team actually winning. Although, Phoebe is the one who improved the most, so it might not be realistic to have them win? And maybe it touches on the moral that ‘winning isn’t everything’. Either way, I think it works. And maybe when Phoebe is about to apologize to Helga, before she gets a chance too, Helga interrupts and dramatically (this is Helga) tells her that she is going to quit volleyball for her. I kinda like the idea of Helga going through her own moral dilemma about whether she is willing to continue to hurt her best friend just for a few seconds of attention from Arnold. Helga’s relieved, of course, when Phoebe tells her not to do that, and that she was in the wrong, not Helga.

Anyway, these are just a couple of ideas I came up with for you to integrate into your work if you like them and think they can fit anywhere in the epi. It will probably also depend on how long you want it to be and how long it is already. This is such a great idea and it sounds really promising!
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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:31 am

Thank you so very much! And I'd thought about Helga trying to quit for Phoebe's sake, I'm glad someone seconded the idea, so I'll definitely add it back in. And I love the psychology idea! Since Phoebe's the only one shown practicing, I do still want them to lose at the end, but not quite so badly, and I want it obvious that Phoebe has *dramatically* improved. Thanks for the wonderful additions!

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Post by funnybones021 on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:32 am

Yeah, I really like this idea too. I was thinking that we should do another sports episode (there have been quite a few)...and it's pretty cool that it's going to be a girls only sports theme, since the boys have already had their own sports episode (granted, it was synchronized swimming lol.)
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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:34 am

funnybones021 wrote:Yeah, I really like this idea too. I was thinking that we should do another sports episode (there have been quite a few)...and it's pretty cool that it's going to be a girls only sports theme, since the boys have already had their own sports episode (granted, it was synchronized swimming lol.)

Well, I *played* girls sports, so ...*laughs* write what you know and all that! Plus I always enjoyed the sports episodes, and it seemed like Helga was always playing the games with the boys, unafraid, but she never really got to be in the spotlight for it unless they were playing against the boys. Plus I love Phoebe, she's so adorable and reminds me of my best friend. Thank you so much, I'm very glad this idea is being met with positive responses. ^_^

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:34 am

I should be more obvious, I mean I played girls' volleyball...

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Post by Dpshrineinclosetgirl on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:44 am

Your welcome! Glad you liked my ideas. I like how this epi “feels” like and episode of Hey Arnold, if that makes sense.
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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Wed Feb 24, 2010 5:46 am

Dpshrineinclosetgirl wrote:Your welcome! Glad you liked my ideas. I like how this epi “feels” like and episode of Hey Arnold, if that makes sense.

It makes sense, and a million thank yous. As a Hey Arnold! fan, I think that's the best compliment I could ever get.

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 4:17 am

Hmm...I'm wondering about how to end it. Perhaps even though B team loses, Trish offers Phoebe a position on the A team (to replace Sheena). Phoebe declines and says something about how she's really just playing to have fun.

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 4:19 am

I like the story. Reminds me of me 'cause i'm not the best goalie on the soccer team but i'm slowly improving.

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 4:50 am

I'm sure you'll be great at it, peachcake. I was terrible at soccer when we played in gym, I was only a good goalie because if there's a ball somewhere on the field, I am GOING to get hit with it. (I got hit on the head twice during a volleyball tournament once...)

I'm still working out kinks with this, and my main concern is this is going to require a lot of 'action' panels...I'm hoping there will be an artist willing to take this on.

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:08 am

Aw. Thanks!

I hate action panels! One time I couldnt tell wheather my character's left foot was infront or not.

BTW, how's the script so far?

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:16 am

Well, it could be a very difficult endeavor, but I'm hoping there will be an artist who is up to the task.

I want to get a good idea of *everything* I want to happen in the story and a good visual. I'm tinkering with it now and trying to make sure I include jokes...but also that I don't go overboard with them (My main weakness as a writer is I make too many jokes. I could have just killed off a character and suddenly I'll make a joke to break the tension. ...yeah.)

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:20 am

lol My main weekness as me is making jokes and concetrating on writing. i cant finish anything!

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:23 am

Any specific suggestions for jokes? The only one I really have in mind is awfully mean spirited...with Sheena overhearing Trish telling Phoebe "You can join the A team...you'll replace Sheena. She stinks anyways." Other than that, all I have that is definitely going in the script is Mr. Simmons asking the girls how to play volleyball.

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:32 am

I dunno, what if Brainy is whezzing and Helga slaps the ball to his face.
or
You said "dig"
umm..
Rhonda:We have to dig in the dirt.
Naideen:for bugs!
Rhonda:i wouldnt do something so disgusting
Helga:she means (what dig means) you (some Helga-ish insultment)

lol I hate making jokes!

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:34 am

Hmm...if there's enough room in the script, a joke about 'digs' could be funny, with Nadine instantly dropping to the ground, wondering aloud how to dig through the gym floor...

Thanks for the suggestion!

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:39 am

Thanks!

Hey look, another Texan! Take that rest of the world! Haha!

Anyways gotta go I have ALOT of homework!
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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Thu Feb 25, 2010 5:52 am

Ah, yes, homework, I remember that...Make sure to do a really good job on it and get good grades! ...You're a Texan, too? Small world, even on the internet! (...especially because of the internet?)

Let's see....so, definites on the team rosters...Helga A team captain, Sheena just barely making A team and Nadine being on A team as well, along with 3 other girls. B team is Phoebe, Rhonda, and Lila...and 3 other girls (...seriously, am I missing a girl? There are more girls in their class, right? Why can't I remember any of them?).

I've got my Helga monologue decided upon, so we're good there...towards the end when Arnold tells Helga that what she did was nice, at first she'll smile...then her usual mean comments, and throwing his hand off her shoulder.

I'm just adding little notes here so I don't forget......Any more suggestions? Jokes, plot ideas, thinking anything should be trimmed down?

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Post by peachcake21 on Thu Feb 25, 2010 6:17 am

I finished and no nothing yet. Yes I am Texan HAHA!

Thats it. Unless you count Patty and and some other characters from the other classes then yeah there is more.

Um.. squeze some coach Witenberg in it XD

Tish: Volleball takes time, energy, sweat ...
(a bunch of girls leave but because Rhonda was too slow she is stuck on the team)
Only the group A and B team girls are left.
We need a guy bleecher joke. I'll think of one tommorrow or today in class.

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Post by Perhapsormaybe on Mon Mar 01, 2010 3:39 am

Outline (...I'm not sure if I should make a new thread for this). The ending is kind of...wonky, I'm not really sure if it's where I want to end it or not. Plus this is LOOOONG, but I really can't see how to trim it down. Aaah! I'm sorry!

1. Arnold and Gerald are standing in a hall together, reading a volleyball tryout announcement. Gerald comments on his like of female athletes, and asks Arnold his opinion of the subject.
2. Arnold shrugs, and says he figures they're all right.
3. Listening in from around the corner are Phoebe and Helga. Helga grabs onto Phoebe and excitedly announces that this is "My--I mean our --chance!" Phoebe asks what chance.
4. Helga elaborates, pointing out that Arnold and Gerald both showed interest in female athletes, and suggests that they tryout for the volleyball team.
5. Phoebe is uncertain, but Helga is too far gone to listen to her objections.
6. Transition somehow to the next day, where the girls are lined up for try outs, with Tish and Mr. Simmons in front of them, Tish announces that she is the A team coach Mr. Simmons is B Team coach, and that only the best will make A team. Mr. Simmons reminds them to try their best.
7. Sheena gets hit on the top of the head with the ball, so technically it does get returned, Lila dove for it but missed, Rhonda took out her cell phone when it rang instead of attempting to hit the ball, Nadine spikes it back, Phoebe falls flat on her face and gets hit with the ball. Helga manages a backwards save.
8. Cut to the girls lined up for their results. Tish announces that Helga's going to be A team captain. Helga's surprised, but also pleased.
9. Tish announces that A team will be Helga, Nadine, Sheena and (3 other girls whose identities are to be determined later)
10. Tish announces the "Losers ...I mean B team are..." Phoebe, Rhonda, Lila (and 3 other girls whose identities are to be determined later), and tells them to go with Mr. Simmons.
11. Tish tells A team that this is not all about fun, that they're going to be champions, winners, that defeat will not be tolerated. This is juxtaposed to Mr. Simmons talking about how much fun they're all going to have, and how it's not about if you win or lose, it's how you play the game.
12. Tish explains that she used to play volleyball in high school and scored the winning point at her state championship. This is played against Mr. Simmons asking the girls if any of them can tell him how volleyball is played.
13. Tish explains that the first game will be a scrimmage between A and B team, just for practice and fun, and that the whole 5th grade will be watching them. She then starts the drills. Mr. Simmons is shown explaining the scrimmage to the B team, but instead of getting them to practice, he dismisses them, as he's still not certain what he's supposed to be doing.
14. The next day at the game, the B team is getting a horrible beat down. Helga's up as first server, and no one can manage to reach the ball in time to return it.
15. In the bleachers, the boy show admiration for Helga's abilities. Harold figures it's because she's part Amazon.
16. Phoebe manages to return the ball, but it goes out of bounds, resulting in yet another point to A team. 17. Gerald shouts that it's all right, they're not beaten yet, and Arnold shouts encouragement as well, though it's painfully obvious that he realizes B team has no chance. Sid points out that they practically are beaten already, as the points stand at 12-0. Gerald glares at him.
17. Helga's managed to score up a few more points. At 14-0, Lila returns the ball only to have Nadine spike it back, sealing the win for A team at 15-0.
18. Tish congratulates the A team while Mr. Simmons consoles the downtrodden B team.
19. Transition somehow to the next game. Phoebe and Helga are in uniform, about to head in to the gym when Arnold and Gerald come up to wish them luck. Phoebe politely thanks them, Helga snorts and says it's the other team that's gonna need the luck.
20. The four walk inside together, and Helga takes her place on court while Arnold and Gerald sit in the stands to watch and Phoebe sits in the stands with the rest of the B team
21. (I don't want to go too much into another volleyball game here. What I'm envisioning is just a few panels of the A team rocking it out - Helga serving, Nadine spiking, soon-to-be-named girls digging and Sheena just getting lucky with getting hit on the head.) Eventually the score will be shown, revealing A team won 15-4.
22. The boys enthusiastically cheer for A team, with Arnold adding in a "Way to go, Helga!"
23. The B team gets up to court (and what I imagine here is a few panels of them...not doing so well. Missing the ball, getting distracted, hitting the ball but having it go backwards instead of forwards)
24. The final score is shown at 15-2 (if it's shown, I'm thinking Lila made one point and Rhonda when she actually bothered to pay attention hit one back)
25. transition to the lockers after school. Helga comes up to Phoebe and tells her they should walk home together. Phoebe agrees to that, then sheepishly admits to Helga that she wants to quit volleyball. She says she's getting laughed at.
26. Helga insists that no one's laughing at Phoebe, but Harold, in the same panel, starts in with "Ha ha, look at the little loser! You got dogged out there!"
27. Helga punches Harold and then amends "Okay, NOW nobody's laughing at you." Phoebe insists that she's not having fun, and suggests that she and Helga find something else to do together.
28. Helga angrily responds that the only reason Phoebe doesn't want to do volleyball is because she wasn't instantly good at it, and says that she won't quit, she's enjoying it, she's good at it, and she's having fun. Phoebe suggests that the only reason Helga's having fun is because they're winning, and that'll change if they start losing.
29. Helga furiously declares that Phoebe's just jealous, and storms off.
30. In an isolated part of the hallway, Helga pulls her locket out of her uniform. "Oh, my beloved... That which has gained even the tiniest bit of your admiration is making my best friend miserable! Do I continue with my athletic display, hoping it will catch your eye and continue to make you notice me, to perchance gain your everlasting love, or should I give it all up for my dearest and most noble friend? Oh, Arnold..." Loud breathing interrupts her.
31. She smacks Brainy without looking.
32. Cut back to Phoebe at her locker, back in her normal clothes. She looks at her uniform for a moment before throwing it on the ground and stomping on it (or jumping up and down on it)
33. Arnold, who has his backpack and is about to head out for home, sees her and asks if she's all right. Phoebe insists that she is, but Arnold points out that it's very out-of-character for her to be stomping on something. He asks again if something's bothering her.
34. Phoebe sighs and explains that she and "H--a friend" only joined the volleyball team for "short sighted and shallow goals." Arnold says "huh?" to which she elaborates - "We joined to get two boys' attention." "Ah," Arnold says, understanding.
35. Phoebe explains how she hadn't expected to be so horrible at volleyball, and certainly hadn't been ready to be laughed at because of it. She wasn't having fun, so she didn't see why her friend wouldn't quit with her. Arnold gently asks if Phoebe's friend is having fun. Arnold looks thoughtful, considering everything he's just been told.
36. Arnold asks if Phoebe's friend is having fun, and Phoebe admits that yes, her friend is, explaining that she's also really good at it. "Then I don't know...isn't it kind of selfish to ask her to give that up? You could always find something else to do together in your free time." Arnold suggests.
37. Phoebe considers. "You're right, Arnold. It was very selfish of me to be doing this...If He---my friend is enjoying volleyball and that guy is paying her a bit more attention, then I can just be happy for her. Thanks, Arnold." "Anytime, Phoebe."
38. Phoebe goes over to Helga's that night, and apologizes. "It was pointed out to me that I was being selfish, and I'm very sorry, Helga. It's just you were so good without even trying, and I was so terrible at it..." "You're not terrible, Pheebs, you just need practice," Helga insists, throwing a ball Phoebe's way.
39. Phoebe winces and ducks. And to learn to keep your eyes open when you're playing. That's your real problem, you can't be afraid of the ball." Helga explains. "In fact...why don't you work with me on this? I bet you can be real great at this. Now, first off, your stance..."
40. Phoebe awkwardly tries to adopt the 'proper' stance (knees bent, arms forward, often clasped together ready to dig, back slightly arched). Helga throws her the ball, but again, Phoebe winces and gets hit in the face.
41. "You've got to stop wincing!" Helga insists. "Think of it like..." she snaps her fingers. "I've got it! I pretend it's Bob, or Miriam...or Olga when I hit it. Just pretend it's someone you don't like." "Oh, I can't think of anybody I could --"
42. Phoebe remembers Harold teasing her. "I'm ready, throw the ball again..." Helga tosses it at her, and this time imagining Harold's face, she smacks the ball so hard it hits the wall and breaks one of Helga's pictures. "Oh, Helga, I'm so sorry!" "eh, don't be, it was a photo of Olga, anyways."
43. Insert indication that the two are going to keep working through the night. (I'm thinking just Helga saying "Now, let's try it again..." and then it fading or doing something to show that the next panel takes place a few days later)
44. The next game, the score is shown - 14 - 11, in favor of the Visitors. Cut to Phoebe returning a ball. She gets their score up to 12, but the next serve one of the random girls we'll need to name at some point misses, and they still lose the game.
45. Mr. Simmons points out by how few points the girls lost, telling them how proud he is, and that he's sure they'll get even better. "Yeah, but they're still losing!" Harold calls out. "Shut it, Pink Boy, or I'll shut it for you!" Helga calls back at him. "You did great, Pheebs."
46. "yeah...you did." Tish agrees. "in fact, I want you on A team. Whaddya say, kiddo?" "But A team's full!" Phoebe points out. "Yeah...well, between you and me, you'd be replacing Sheena." (Sheena may or may not overhear this, I'm not sure).
47. "See, Phoebe! You can be on the team with me! This'll be great!" Helga insists, putting a hand on Phoebe's back. "No," Phoebe declines. "I think I'd rather stay on the B team...it's just more fun for me. I hope you understand."
48. "Yeah, that's cool," Helga agrees. "We'll still get to travel together." "Plus," Phoebe looks towards the stands.
49. Gerald and Arnold are both shown. Gerald waves when he sees Phoebe looking at him. From offpanel, Phoebe adds "Looks like your goal was accomplished..."

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Post by Danny1112 on Fri Jul 23, 2010 3:48 am

What I like about this idea is that it'll get some of Helga's relationship with Phoebe in there, Helga wanting Arnold's attention and Phoebe trying for Gerald's attention. I was going to put Big Bob in here, too (with him actually being proud of Helga), but I thought it might make the story a bit too...busy.


Hmm it might but i love this idea sunny
It really shows something What a Face Not sarcasim lol
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Post by Meganium on Fri Jul 23, 2010 4:55 am

Yeah, I really loved this idea as well <3 I hope it hasn't been given up on, especially when it was so far into its development!
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